YA Carnie Potluck

The post for this week’s YA Indie Carnival is to display a couple paragraphs of something we are working on. These opening paragraphs are from a short story called ‘Kisses’. It’s an urban paranormal fantasy story. It is currently submitted for publication.


by Rachel Coles

Terry tried hard not to kick the side of the automatic door as it opened on an explosion of scarlet and bubble-gum satin and lace. The menagerie of heart bedecked stuffed animals crowded the aisles like a cupid-struck taxidermist’s fantasy, and Terry’s worst nightmare. The stacks of chocolate boxes waited, like Gretel’s witch in her candy house, to tempt her into into a sugar feeding frenzy that would use up every drop of insulin in her diabetic body for the rest of her life. Valentine’s Day sucks! Fuck Valentine’s Day! she thought, as she savagely shoved the grocery cart ahead of her. It nearly careened into a stand of skimpy thong underwear with curly “I Love You” script littering the tiny triangle of fabric.

She tossed packets of lettuce and other veggies in her cart haphazardly, and then buried them under bags of chips and other snack food. Two minutes and counting, she thought as she reached for the rice cakes which were also decorated with hearts on the package, around a portly woman blocking the entire aisle with her cart. If I don’t get out of here soon, I’m going to shoot these people, she vowed. Two days until Venereal Day. I’m not going to survive this time without multiple homicide.          End                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Please visit the other Carnies for some tastes of their work:                                            

http://www.refractedlightreviews.com Danny Snell’s Refracted Light Reviews

http://pattilarsen.blogspot.com Patti Larsen, Author of The Ghost Boy of MacKenzie House, the Hunted series, and the Hayle Coven novels.
http://courtneycolewrites.wordpress.com Courtney Cole, Author of Every Last Kiss, Fated, Princess, and Guardian. Also a contributing author in The Glassheart Chronicles.
http://wrenemerson.wordpress.com Wren Emerson, Author of I Wish and a contributing author in The Glassheart Chronicles.
http://laurasmagicday.wordpress.com Laura Elliott, Author of Winnemucca.
http://nicoleawilliams.blogspot.com Nichole A. Williams, Author of Eternal Eden, and the upcoming Fallen Eden. She is also participating in the Glassheart Chronicles.
http://fisheramelie.com/blog/ Fisher Amelie, Author of The Understorey, as well as a contributing author in The Glassheart Chronicles.
http://amyjonesyaff.blogspot.com Amy Maurer Jones, Author of The Soul Quest Trilogy as well as a contributing author in The Glassheart Chronicles.
http://thewarriorseries.blogspot.com T. R. Graves, Author of Warriors of the Cross.
http://ctefft.blogspot.com Cyndi Tefft, Author of Between
http://pjhoover.blogspot.com P.J. Hoover, Author of Solstice, The Emerald Tablet, The Navel of the World, The Necropolis.
http://www.aliciamccalla.com Alicia McCalla, Author of the upcoming science-fiction novel Breaking Free.
http://heathercashman.com/better_off_read Heather Cashman, Author of Perception.

6 Responses to “YA Carnie Potluck”

  1. oooh… I love her already! Fabulous descriptive opening.

  2. Dani @ Refracted Light Reviews Says:

    lol…love it. You’ve set the scene perfectly, and Terry is wonderfully relatable. What woman hasn’t had this reaction toward Valentine’s Day?

  3. POWERFUL! If this is how it starts I’m going to have to workout a lot to keep up with this! Love it, full-throttle tension!

  4. Oh…that is good! I’ve said several times that it is just humbling to be in the vacinity of all these wonderful authors. Congrats! Have a great weekend!

  5. She sounds just like I used to once upon a time (without the bad word). I feel like I know her already. Thanks for the suggestion. I look forward to reading her story.

  6. Rachel, what a snarky character. She’s total teen girl. Great paragraph. Like to read more.

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